Here is an excerpt from Nickie's diary:
OMG, OMG, you're never gonna believe what happened today. I had a real live conversation with Craig. And Sonia Scrag was nowhere in sight.
Ooh, I'm still thinking about it now, replaying it over and over and over in my head. Rewinding the video, fast forwarding, wishing I could delete stupid comments I made.
God, I hope he doesn't think I'm dumb. Or thick. I mean, I was dumbstruck when I bumped into Craig. Seeing him at the mall and actually talking to him was the last thing I expected to happen.
He is such a hottie. That blonde sweep of fringe that half covers one of his dark brown eyes. And that smile. I'm surprised that Colgate hasn't signed him up to do toothpaste commercials. Because its pretty damn special. And when he smiled at me today, it's a wonder they didn't have to call a mop to aisle ten.
Mum was right about one thing. I should've got a summer job. But in Woolies, not Target. Then I could've been hanging around Craig all summer. And got paid for it. Double bonus.
So that's where I ran into Craig. In Woolies. Mum sent me down to pick up some bread and milk. Told me to make myself useful. And I spotted him from the end of the aisle, stacking cans on shelves. So I went and walked up near him, and nonchantly picked up a can of baked beans like it was the most fascinating object in the world. I didn't want to be the first to say hello. Because it would be mortifying if he sneered at me, or didn't return my greeting. So I just pretended that I didn't see him, and acted like I had serious business with that can of baked beans.
And then he spoke. I swear my heart stopped beating, and I gasped for breath, as he said. 'Be careful, Nickie. They make you fart.'
I turned to him. 'Craig, hello, I didn't see you there.'
He smiled. I think he knew the game I was playing. Because for a start, Craig isn't thick.
'Sure, sure, Nickie. But those beans should come with a health warning sticker. Danger: causes flatulence.'
I spun the can around in my hand. 'You're right. Trouble is, my little brother has requested baked beans. And my brother's tantrums are deadlier than his farts.'
Craig chuckled. 'And how old is your brother?'
'Twelve.'
'Yep, farting is a productive hobby for a twelve year old.'
'Hobby? I reckon it's a weapon of mass destruction.'
'Don't worry. He'll grow out of it.'
'I'm not so sure of that. Danny has farting battles with my thirty year old uncle.'
'Do they take bets? Well, Nickie you'll have to invite me over to one of your family barbecues. It sounds entertaining.'
I blushed. I couldn't believe it. I have a massive crush on this guy and I've just spent five minutes talking about farts. That would be something to share with the grandkids.
I like the scene, and the whole flatulence conversation. Super embarrassing for a 16 year old. But I think it will be extremely funny when Nickie has her deja vu moment with this scene, and realises that she is reliving it again. And later this will show her the power of the diary.
The writing progress hasn't been as good as yesterday. I didn't do the usual writing during breaks at work. At morning tea, I was on the computer in the tearoom checking out the status of my ebay auctions. I was outbid on two auctions, and I put in a successful bid for another (will be posting about that when I receive the item) and then at lunch time, I was running around town, as one tends to do on payday.
So I'm not going to try and push through until midnight tonight. I really need some more sleep. I was very hyper last night when I finished writing so I didn't sleep for a while. And I can't afford to sleep in and be late for work. Anyway the weekend will soon be here with a long luxurious stretch of writing time.
2 comments:
Nice work!! Good luck with the writing thing...I'm struggling with an uncreative full time job at the moment too...really cuts into writing time!!
I really like the character's voice ~ so true to life for a 16 year old! This is something that would've happened to my sister, an embarrassing conversation with her crush in the grocery store ... can't wait to see where this goes!
Keep up the good work!
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